Here is my school trip recount hope you enjoy my lovely video.
I really like that I have used some of alliteration and I think I could use a bit more of vocabulary and more adjective
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Tuesday, September 6, 2016
Best School Trip Ever
Best Ski Trip Ever
Here is my school trip recount hope you enjoy my lovely video.
Here is my school trip recount hope you enjoy my lovely video.
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Kia Orana Boston.
ReplyDeleteI love how on your doc, you have a gif of the bus so it looks interesting because it moves. I like that you have explained what you like about your own writing and how your next step is to increase the complexity of your vocabulary. We will work on this as a class.
Hi Boston it is Hunter here. I really like how you have done a screencastify. This story reminded me of how much fun I had at the ski trip. I think you could keep reading it out loud so you can say more fluently.
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